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NIKON CORPORATION
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NIKON D5100
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Jan 9, 2012, 3:54:37 PM
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I see you think you're so clever now by Johnny23xx I see you think you're so clever now by Johnny23xx
First shoot with the wonderfully talented Rivi Madison :iconrebtang900:

EDIT: after a recent critique, I've decided to clean this image up.
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Well, I am not much of a critic, nor do I hold much knowledge of model photography, but since this piece just makes me re-see it, and linger, I'm writing this critique.

I shall start off with the framing. I think with the choice of location, and lighting angle, this is almost perfect. With the main subject in the foreground, the blur on it adds a lot of impact, for her reflection instantly draws your eyes. Although the tapering frames of the mirror look a little off, but then that is inevitable.

The positioning of the model is just perfect. Her hair drawn to the other side of the light gives a beautiful split effect of light and dark. And overall, the lighting is just right for a washed-out, dark, wash-room shot. Her expression too goes well with the idea conveyed, and the almost too faint writing on the top right corner. It's hard not to catch her gaze, and it seems that her eyes convey "You're so clever now" not to herself, but to the one seeing the photograph. I think it is almost magical.

As for the processing, it is just right. The faded out look adds to the whole feel of the image, and helps hide the otherwise distracting shapes in the background. The slight bluish tint conveys a much alluded to colder atmosphere, and even makes the skin look less rosy(?).

Overall, a very intense photograph which you can keep looking at, where the intensity only draws you, not overpowers. Since the person/reflection twin subjects have been used quite a lot, I did not rate this high on originality, but I re-affirm, the execution is impeccable, which matters most.

All in all, a wonderful photograph. :clap: Would love to see more of your work soon!

Cheers! :)
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This picture leaves an interesting feeling that makes me want to learn more about the model's thoughts and the photographer's motivations. Ok, it's a portrait in a (dirty) mirror of a girl who looks a bit lost, maybe a bit sad too: we have seen shots like that dozens of time. The good mood of the picture is given by the overall white-grayis tone that is a good choice, bettre than a strong contrasted picture that would have been too hard for what is wanted to be demonstrated here.
The composition is quite well balanced on the left side, and the model's look captivate ours, and her body in the mirror stands above her shoulder on the foreground. I simply regret the right most part of the picture that I think is too bright and can make the eye loose itself there. I guess cutting everything at the right of her head might restore a good balance without losing any interesting details that stand on the left side. Or else, maybe darken the wall on the right.
The lighting is pretty good here as her body has nice and smooth tones with highlights which give a lot of volume, while the background (above the tube) stays flat with no reflection. The right part of her face is well dip into darkness which gives a very mysterious/shy feeling too. Two details that tickle me: the highlight on the tip of the nose could be removed as it's a spot that I focus on; the shadow of her hair lock hides a bit too much the eye, a few millimeters back might avoid this.
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vewolff Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2012   Photographer
You're photo got featured: body parts feature #5
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benneido Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
beautiful..
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jasontagphoto Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2012  Professional General Artist
Such a cool shot! Bravo!
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rebtang900 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2012  Professional General Artist
I like the original I have to say. This looks a bit odd. And I can't wait to work with you again <3
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Johnny23xx Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Yes and no, I never liked that the highlights in your hair were dark, and that the left half of your face just fell into darkness, it bothered the eye to me. Also the critic above made me really notice the hot-spot on your nose, and once I spotted it, I could only see that.
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vewolff Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2012   Photographer
Wow, really impressive portrait. Like her facial expression. Anyhow the photo has something offensive but also something innocent. Great work!
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Johnny23xx Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
in what way do you mean offensive?
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Johnny23xx Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Glad you like it. I couldn't be more pleased, personally with how well this photograph came out and even more so with how well it has been received here on DA.
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borabalbey Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2012
nice shot! i like this :)
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Johnny23xx Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
:gummybear:
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pebblesdork Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012
Thank you for submitting to #Alluring-Photos
Your photo has been recognized as one of the recent best submissions, and is in the running to be featured.
Here's the poll: [link]
I wish you the best of luck!
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Johnny23xx Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
That's really awesome and I'm honored :-)

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miontre Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
This is really cool :D
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Johnny23xx Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
:tp::gummybear::gummybear::tp:
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AlexScott1990 Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I really love this, the way the title works with the picture is seamless. I also love her expression through this, the way the mirror relflects it back at her and how her gaze is set off, staring at the camera itself. Just really well done with this.

My favorite thing about this has got to be the color of the lips and the relationship they have with the paler hue of her skin. Just pretty stunning here. Good Job.
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Johnny23xx Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks! It was a rather difficult shot to light correctly. This bathroom was very very small and I had to position my flash outside the doorway; which was fine except that it would very strongly illuminate the door frame and make the lighting look very artificial. At the time I was set on taking the shot over her right shoulder which caught the illuminated door frame. Right before we wrapped up this location, I decided to snap a few over her left shoulder and viola! the shot I wanted.
The way she's looking at the camera makes this shot feel like the viewer has walked in on an intimate moment of self reflection, but not necessarily the positive type.
With you mentioning her lip, I think I'm going to try some burning and dodging.

Glad you like the shot!
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AlexScott1990 Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
No problem.
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Johnny23xx Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
just did a bit of burn and dodge, what do you think?
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AxhellWood Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2012
Awesome composition and perfect light....and obviously, wonderful model!
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Johnny23xx Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Lighting was difficult due to the size of the room, but after readjusting my position I nailed it. She really is!
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PSK-Photo Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2012
Very nice :)
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Johnny23xx Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
thanks!
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Jubileeeee Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2012  Student Photographer
LOVE This picture!!
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Johnny23xx Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
:-) THANKS!
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